Comments to "The Ghost in the Mountain"

Greetings Fang-Tzu,

Congratulations on your recent accomplishment! You should be very proud of your writing and your ability to showcase your skills. The judges enjoyed your piece and provided the following feedback on your writing:

"This story has some very interesting elements and you undertook the challenging task of blending reality and fantasy (fable). There needs to be a clearer more understanding link between the real world moments and the fantasy moments and the final result of blending them should have a stronger pay off or impact on the reader at the conclusion of your story."

"Some nice images, but this piece remains a bit cryptic. I needed something more concrete. I do appreciate some of the atmospheric touches."

"I love how wise she is and how she looks at him and says "You look like him. But you are so different." The difference doesn't have to be explained- I'm so glad you don't. The fairy tale aspect makes me think of the English writer Neil Gaiman. You should check out his stories."

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Well, of course, if readers have more background knowledge about the meaning of "September 9", and Chu Ci, this story will probably be more interesting. However, this is my intention that not to explain these cultural meanings. I do believe a good story should allow readers have their own fantasy. This is, indeed, not a Chinese cultural dictionary. 

However, I notice cultural difference still exist. Asian countries seem to be in the other world.....

But again, it is not that different actually. We still share the same Neil Gaiman story!!

LACMA, I really like this outdoor design. Put this photo for no reason.